Greta felt her smile falter.
She looked forward to her nights out with her girlfriends,
circling the date in her planner and staring at it during mind-numbing staff
meetings or nights at home when In Style called to her more loudly than one of
her beloved novels or the never-ending chain of e-mails she often tackled from
her couch.
Cate pushed back the blonde curls ever tumbling over her
forehead, despite headbands and bobby pins and expensive styling products that
she ended up tossing across her bathroom in disgust.
Boldness might not have been the right tactic.
“Oh don’t look at me like that! You look great, Gee, but you still can’t wear
that.”
Carrying her own wine glass into the hallway, craning her
neck to look in Cate’s full-length mirror, Greta turned a critical eye to her
reflection, searching for her error.
The cotton shift fell nearly to her knees, the blue slightly
deeper than the palest shade on the paint swatch that sat, forgotten, on her
kitchen counter at home. Flattering and
familiar, it was one of Greta’s favorite dresses.
“It’s pretty,” Greta smiled at her college roommate, “And it
doesn’t matter. I didn’t bring anything
else.”
“Of course it’s pretty,” Cate said, waving her chipped
manicure dismissively, “Everything you have is pretty. Well, except those yoga pants you won’t get
rid of. But maybe it’s time that you
branched out beyond pretty.”
Greta drank her wine, letting Cate ruminate in thought. After a suspiciously short moment, Cate
rushed into her bedroom and returned with a mass of denim in the hand not
occupied by a wine glass.
“Try these. They’re
too small on me,” Cate explained with an exaggerated sigh, walking back to the café
table for more wine.
Holding up the jeans, a tendril of wariness snaked around
her brain. Cate had been the same size
since they had lived together years ago.
A size Greta was always dancing just above, even on her thinnest days.
“Where’d you get these?”
“What? I told…” Cate
trailed off, then looked up, eyes traipsing between mischief and guilt.
“Fine. I bought
them. I know they’ll be perfect. It’s time you got back into some sexy jeans,”
Cate said, giggling in defiance.
“What I’m wearing is fine,” Greta protested. “It’s not like I’m the only one not wearing
your fancy jeans uniform.”
Cate’s hand waved through the air again.
“Maybe not. But you’re
the one who needs them.”
“I’m not ready to deal with dating quite yet,” Greta said
quietly, eyes entreating Cate to understand.
“Oh honey, who said anything about dating?” Cate poured both
of them more wine, eyes and smile embracing Greta from across the room. “You need them. Not any of the guys lucky enough to see you
wearing them. Just try ‘em on.”
Knowing they would fit perfectly – Cate’s eye for clothes
was both a gift and a practiced skill – Greta slid into them, reluctantly.
Walking into Cate’s closet to pull out a forgettable,
forgivingly stretchy top, Greta felt a change in her gait.
“It’s the wine,” she told herself, sliding her feet into her
neutral heels, twisting in front of the mirror to inspect every possible angle
for a reason not to wear the gift.
It wasn’t the wine.
Greta wore the jeans for three straight days.
If you're interested in Greta's story, this piece takes place between "She'll Understand" and "Her Red Shoes".
the prompt:
Jeans. They can evoke so much emotion in us: the hot jeans we wear on a date, the skinny jeans we can finally fit into, mom jeans we vow never to wear, the comfy jeans we’ll never throw out.
I need an awesome pair of jeans like that! Actually... we all do. Oh, and a girls night out too!
ReplyDeleteThe only thing that stuck out as odd to me was the paragraph about Cate's hair. It seemed out of place a little with the story being about clothing and focusing more on what Greta was wearing. I could be wrong though.
Ah, I remember the good ol' days, when you can count on a sexy pair of jeans to feel your best. Unfortunately for me, those days are over *sigh* LOL.
ReplyDeleteCan't help but get excited along with Greta though... the jeans symbolizes a beginning, a transformation...
Woot for sexy jeans! Greta gets her groove back :)
ReplyDeleteMy only critique is I found it difficult to follow whose point of view it was in. I felt like it bounced a bit between Cate and Greta.
Thanks Carrie! I'll work on cleaning that up a little before I add it to her story page :)
ReplyDeleteIt makes me want to go jeans shopping. Though I don't really have much opportunity to don the sexy jeans.
ReplyDeleteMaybe I'll take that out. I was trying to get a little more of her personality across, but I guess it didn't really fit :) Thanks Jackie!
ReplyDeleteI need Cate to go shopping for me! :)
ReplyDeleteI did find this sentence confusing though "Not any of the guys lucky enough to see you wearing them.". Assuming the Cate means that the guys don't need the jeans, but it seems akward somehow.
I love the idea of this kind of gift -- much more than a gift of clothing, it's a gift of perspective. Cate finds a concrete way to tell Greta what she sees in her AND to help Greta see it for herself. That's a great friend, and a lovely scene between these two characters.
ReplyDeleteMy favorite line: "in the hand not occupied by a wine glass."
I second the comments about POV and the confusing sentence that begins, "Not any of the guys..."
And I, too, would like to have Cate go shopping for me. :-)
I love this. I may have to go jean shopping soon...
ReplyDeleteLove this, Angela! I love how good jeans can make you feel great!
ReplyDeleteYou are doing a great job with the Greta story-line.
OH Man!! I would kill to find a pair of jeans that made me feel that way!
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written as always!
Ditto the part about Cate's hair.
ReplyDeleteBy the way I want those jeans...
I love how she walks differently in the jeans! So realistic. And what a good friend to make her "wake-up" a little. I had a pair of jeans that felt that good, well, I still have them, they just don't fit. Sigh. Maybe it's time to buy a new pair.
ReplyDeleteIt's hard to let go of a pair like that!
ReplyDeleteIt was perfect,right down to the phenomenal last line. Wow Ang, your writing was superb for this prompt. I enjoyed so many things about this, esp the description of her best friend's hair. Wow, wow, wow.
ReplyDeleteOh, this was fabulous. I loved this line: "a tendril of wariness snaked around
ReplyDeleteher brain...." because it's so incredibly descriptive and evokes a bit of suspicion.
But the heart of this piece, was this line: “You need them. Not any of the guys lucky enough to see you
wearing them. Just try ‘em on.”It speaks volumes about Cate. Greta is lucky to have her.
Thanks Nancy! I think I need to tweak that line a little, because it seems to have some ambiguity, according to other comments. I'm glad you noticed/liked it, though, because when I was writing this, I thought that was an integral part of their exchange, and her realization of the point of the jeans.
ReplyDeleteThanks Kir! The hair description has actually drawn some ire, so I'm glad it wasn't a complete wash (ha ha, a hair joke!)
ReplyDeleteIt's hard to FIND a pair like that.
ReplyDeleteSigh. Me too. I finally "retired" my most favorite jeans last winter, though I hadn't worn them in years. I know I need something new, but I am cheaper than I used to be but also have higher standards. Not the best combination :)
ReplyDeleteI want them, too, believe me :)
ReplyDeleteThank you :) If I find those jeans, I will pass along the information :)
ReplyDeleteI have to go, too. It's not as fun for me as it used to be!
ReplyDeleteI think we all need a Cate, huh? Thank you for your thoughtful comment; I appreciate it.
ReplyDeleteI actually wanted it to mean that Greta needed the jeans, she didn't need the guys necessarily. Since she talks about not being ready to date. Cate's intention was to make her feel better about herself, not really to attract an actual date.
ReplyDeleteYou have a light touch with the emotions, which I love. Just enough to let me read the deeper meaning myself.
ReplyDeleteHappy for Greta.
Thank you! Evoking emotion is one of the things I actually think I can do fairly well. Unlike dialogue, gah! which is one of the reasons I shy away from it!
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