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Friday, September 30, 2011

They Should Have Worn Flats

Greta’s hands curled around the cardboard cup, searching for comfort as she breathed in the distinctive scent of coffee and chicory.  They’d been in New Orleans for three days, and she was half in love with the city, but the coffee made her think of mornings with Drew.

A dusting of powdered sugar and the lingering scent of rum replaced Cate’s carefully applied make-up and perfume.  Wrinkling her nose a bit, Greta tested the café au lait, cooled from scalding, knowing it would only compound the filmy feeling in her mouth.  Cate wasn’t the only one radiating rum fumes.

Cate reached wordlessly for the cup, and it passed between them like an embrace, recognizing years of familiarity. 

Hours ago, as their other friends retreated back to the hotel, Cate and Greta tightened their dancing circle until it was only the two of them, shaking and squealing to every song, even the ones they were hearing for the first time.  Drawn in by short dresses, impossible platforms, and laughter spilling from glossed lips, men found their greetings received with a smile, then subtly dismissed.

“I want a girls’ weekend!” Cate had insisted, the last of their small group to need a bachelorette party.

“A spa weekend?” Greta had questioned, already resigned to the inevitable answer.

“Sure, we can hit a spa.  After we dance until our feet fall off,” Cate had replied, her infectious giggle the reason Greta knew she would give Cate the bachelorette weekend of her dreams.

Now, sitting on back to back benches, feet kicked up onto armrests, Greta and Cate shared the third beignet and cup of coffee, swollen feet only part of the reason they were watching the sun rise, humidity already dampening the streets.

“Thanks G,” Cate spoke up suddenly, all of the rum gone from her voice.

“Anytime C.  Anytime,” Greta answered absently, flexing her toes in her red heels, her head tilted towards her friend’s curls.

“This must be a little awful,” Cate continued.  “The wedding…”

Caffeine pushed Cate’s meaning through the fog of exhaustion into which Greta had settled.

“Oh, honey.  No.  Your wedding is amazing.  Your groom is amazing,” Greta smiled, making sure their eyes met and held as she passed the coffee yet again.

“He is, isn’t he?” Cate laughed as she swung her legs to the ground, wincing a little.  “I just worried this would be a tough weekend for you.”

Greta’s fingers touched her purse briefly, the text message she had received less than an hour ago memorized.

“You deserved the best dance party we could find.  It wasn’t tough at all,” Greta reassured.

Going on our run and missing you.  I’m calling the movers tomorrow. Xo

The balls of her feet flamed with each step as they began the walk back to their hotel.

“I’d say it was perfect.”


This is the latest in Greta's story.


the prompt:
New Orleans...my favorite...

30 comments:

  1. That last part is like the light at the end of the tunnel! :)

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  2. "Caffeine pushed Cate's meaning through the fog..."  beautifully put, WOW!

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  3. I love thinking of those two friends dancing and celebrating...their feet aching and their spirits high. I always miss John when we are apart, even if I really need that time away, even if I'm having a ball. I so felt these emotions with her.

    your writing was just fun and flowed so well.


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  4. Two best friends, They know each other so well, they finish each others sentences. Very nice.

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  5. Feels like a cliff hanger to me!  More,please.

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  6. Great post!  I could really see everything that was happening.  Now I'm going to have to read the rest of Greta's story. :)

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  7. This is lovely. I could feel their exhaustion. And their affection for one another. Well done!

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  8. Love: "Cate reached wordlessly for the cup, and it passed between them like an embrace, recognizing years of familiarity." and "...laughter spilling from glossed lips..." and "Caffeine pushed Cate’s meaning through the fog of exhaustion into which Greta had settled."  I could really see the girls (okay, women, but when I see close friendships like that, that have been around for years, I tend to think of them as still the girls they once were....not from experience or anything! ;> lol) and their close friendship.  And the text, its timing...ouch.

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  9. I love Greta already! Very nice piece. I'll need to check out the rest of Greta's story.. 

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  10. I love seeing Greta move into this new place in her life. And the images here are great. Good job!

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  11. There's a lot under the surface here. Greta's emotions, Drew's text--can't wait to see what happens... The surface is so true though, the balance between wanting a friend's happiness despite our own personal tragedy.

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  12. There seemed to be a fog over their conversation.  Lots of hidden meanings shared and not shared.  Awesome descriptions--you made me crave a beignet!

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  13. Everyone needs a best friend like that!! Love your Greta story as usual :)

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  14. Thank you!  Friends like that are absolutely necessary.

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  15. Oh, me, too.  It's unfortunate that the beignets are so far away from Michigan; I really wanted one after I wrote this LOL.

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  16. It can be a tough juggling act, balancing our own feelings with our feelings about other people's current situations.

    Good things better happen from the text.  The poor girl has been through enough, I think.

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  17. Thank you!  I am happy she is moving forward, too.

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  18. Well, thanks!  I hope you like some of the other pieces as well!

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  19. That kind of friendship can be more valuable than anything else in the world, right?  

    I still think of my girlfriends and I as "girls" :)

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  20. Dancing all night isn't as easy as it once was, that's for sure!

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  21. Thank you!  I hope you like the rest of it, too :)

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  22. There will be more :)  I've been with her for a while, so I think I'll be following her to the close of this part of her life.

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  23. Stay tuned...

    :) (Probably next Friday!)

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  24. Aren't friends like that the best?

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  25. Isn't it funny that even when you're having fun, that other person is still so present? (And now the kids, but that's a different feeling all together.)

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  26. Oh thanks!  It's a good thing for her :)

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  27. Thanks!  Sometimes we all need a little extra caffeine in our lives ;)

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  28. I liked the easy camaraderie between these two women. It's obvious they've known each for some time. I liked how they shared the coffees and their thoughts. I agreed with others that there's a lot we're not quite seeing yet. Well written and a good read. Thank you for sharing this story:~)

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