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Tuesday, September 27, 2011

Her Mother's Pearls

INT – GUEST BEDROOM, DAY

Sunlight streams through a window, curtains pulled back to allow for maximum light.

The room is spotless, a cream shag rug contrasting sharply with the dark wooden floors, clean but worn.

The closet door is firmly closed, the only signs of the room’s inhabitant are the glass perfume bottles and leather jewelry case sitting on the elongated dresser, in front of the mirror.

ABBEY walks into the room, slowly, wrapping her oversized sweater more tightly around her waist.  The rich grey picks up the few strands of silver threaded through her long hair, twisted into a neat chignon, slightly off center.

Muffled voices grow almost imperceptible as ABBEY closes the door to the hallway

ABBEY (V.O.)
My mother always said she lived a very ordinary life…

ABBEY opens the jewelry box and picks up several strands of pearls, letting them slide through her fingers before placing them absentmindedly in the pocket of her sweater, hand remaining in the pocket, closed around the necklace.

ABBEY’S eyes follow the shaft of sun to an old trunk sitting against the wall.  Dust dances in the sunlight as she opens the lid, revealing frame photographs, yellowing journals, and worn books.

“Wonderful Tonight” (instrumental) quietly plays (BACKGROUND)

ABBEY (V.O.)
…blessed by a collection of extraordinary moments…

Kneeling next to the trunk, ABBEY picks up and gently places a wedding photo of Ryan and Angela on the floor next to her, fingers tracing the outline of their faces.

MUSIC fades into “Baby Mine”.

ABBEY places two more frames next to the wedding picture, a pink framed photograph of her as a baby, holding a pink cell phone upside down, wearing a pink gingham jumper, and a black and white photo of DYLAN as a newborn, wearing only a polka-dot diaper cover, fist curled under his chin.

ABBEY (V.O.)
She told me, more than once, that she knew she wanted to be a writer from the time she knew how to write…

She carefully pulls a journal out of the trunk and places it on top of the frames.

Her hand reaches back into her sweater pocket to feel the pearls as she looks back towards the perfume bottles.

ABBEY (V.O.)
…but she said she knew she would be a writer the summer she went to journalism camp at Columbia University.

AIRPLANE TAKING OFF (Background)

Fade to black.


I'd say "be gentle," since I've never even attempted screenplay formatting until now.  But I guess I can't say that, since I helped come up with the prompt.
Obviously, I've taken some artistic license with this piece.

the prompt:

Congratulations! Your best selling memoir has just been optioned by a major motion picture studio, and the producers want you advising on the script.  Write the opening scene for the movie.  Would you begin with a visual montage?  Voice-over? Flashback or forward? A conversation? The trick here is to look through a lens. The camera needs to tell the story through visuals, action, dialogue.

23 comments:

  1. Your post always managed to get me teary-eyed!  Oh, I couldn't imagine what it would be like when the time comes that I would no longer be able to hold my daughter in my arms... and I hope above all hopes that by then she would know that her Mommy truly had lived for the sole purpose of loving her. 

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  2. You always have a way of taking my breath away in your posts. I can't imagine what it will be like when I can't hold my little ones anymore, watching them sort through our life on their own. I love how you captured this.

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  3. Oh I could just picture the scene, so touching. Putting life into this perspective is so hard, yet, you made it beautiful. 

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  4. Yours was so fantastic!!!! Wow! Everything about it brought me the sense that I was in that room, standing next to Abbey watching her tell your story. I loved all the little nuances and descriptive words, it was just about perfect.

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  5. Dude, so emotionally urgent and intriquing immediately. Well done. What's next?

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  6. Beautiful... thanks for stopping by Words are Timeless and your thoughtful comments. Love your blog, now a follower.

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  7. Aack! Now I'm embarrassed by the mess I tried to pass off as a screenplay. Your whole scene is so beautiful and peaceful. There is even a feeling of mystery and intrigue as we wonder what happened at this camp. And what happened to poor Angela that left Abbey to go through her mother's things? So much was said here! Great job.

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  8. This was so touching.  I love it and you did a great job with the prompt.  Your screenplay formatting was excellent, also-it would definitely have passed muster in one of my college classes. :)

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  9. I loved this look at you through your daughter's eyes.  I totally want to see this movie now!

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  10. You really created a character with this scene. Very elegant!

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  11. Oh, awesome. You did a great job with this format. (I was too scared to try!) I love how you provided so much information in a simple, beautiful scene.

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  12. Wow, so well done. I can't help but feel a touch of bittersweet here. Probably not your intention, just the way it struck me.

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  13. Thanks Robin!  I've never even thought about it before.  It helped a little not to have much dialogue to work with in this one :)

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  14. I don't mind a bittersweet reaction :)  It's much better than no reaction at all!

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  15. Aw, thanks...One day, right? LOL

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  16. Yay!  What a fun thing to study in college.  My husband (then boyfriend) took a basic film class, and I would actually go hang out there sometimes.

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  17. Oh thank you!  I meant for it to read with her as an older lady, so that I lived a long, happy life before whatever happened :)

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  18. Thanks!  I'm glad you liked this piece (and Tiaras & Trucks.)

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  19. Well, thanks!  In the movie, I think I'd go back to that summer during high school.  Good times :)

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  20. Thanks Kir!  I can only hope that things continue so well :)

    I was worried about it.

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  21. Some of it was definitely wishful thinking, but it was fun to try something different.

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  22. The bigger the get, the more amazing they get, but it's hard to imagine the day we're not all under one roof, one big team.

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  23. Yes, this.  If I do nothing else in life, I want my kids to know they are my life.

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