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Thursday, August 25, 2011

Moonlight

the prompt:

Let’s lighten it up around here. And when I say lighten, I mean REALLY lighten.
This week’s assignment will require the fewest number of words ever: we want you to write a story – your choice of topic – as a tweet.
That’s right. One hundred and forty characters. Not words. Characters.
Make us laugh. Make us think. Make us want more.

His fingertips trace her jaw.
Whispers drift into silence.
Dreams she had abandoned morph into something new as they sleep, limbs entwined.

28 comments:

  1. Ooh. It has so much promise. I can't wait to hear more.

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  2. Ooh Angie, it's perfect. It is Greta right?? Her second chance, her new life. LOVE it!!!

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  3. oh man.

    #swoon

    thank you for this one.  Makes me smile :)

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  4. Beautifully done. So much sexy in so few words...and yet, you have emotion and feeling, too! I loved this!

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  5. I agree, swoon! A great moment captured here. 

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  6. Love this!! So much said in so few words.

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  7. Passionate and lovely.  I want to hear more!

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  8. Awww, new love.

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  9. Sigh. Is it our sad heroine? I hope so..

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  10. So funny...my reaction was "yum".  When I pulled up the comments it seems you have a theme going!  Yup, yummy for sure!

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  11. Beautifully written. Your imagery is perfect.

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  12. So so passionate. There is such an aura of peace surrounding this peace- the quiet of a night, the quiet of a content life. Beautiful work.

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  13. Siiiiiigh....I just adore it.  Beautifully done.  Beautifully.

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  14. Just so lovely. Sigh.
    Dreams abandoned. Morphing into new. Sigh.

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  15. It is wonderful That things are rekindled.

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  16. Dana @ CheckingPocketsAugust 26, 2011 at 10:16 PM

    I absolutely loved this! Beautiful. Evokes so much feeling.

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  17. Sigh...

    So much said in so few words.

    The tiniest of concrit: eliminating the past of "had" might make it a bit tighter. A simple switch of "Abandoned dreams morph into something...." make it match the present feel a bit better.

    Only my opinion, but I know you like concrit. :-)

    I think I shivered a bit with just the first line. I want more.

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  18. I LOVE concrit :)  thank you!  I agree that it's a good change, bringing the moment back to her present instead of anchoring it in the past.

    I appreciate it.

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  19. Oh la lahhh.  And love begins.

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  20. Dreams really do 'morph' as lives become 'entwined', don't they.  Nicely done! :>

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  21. Such a nice picture you painted!

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  22. Oh cozy sleepy love. I love this. I need to go cuddle now. <3

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  23. So loving and beautifully written! Excellent!

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